Reviewer: Sailor Mercury
Reviewing Site: Tsunami of Sound
URL: http://www.silversenshi.net/michiru
Layout/Loading Time - 15 points
Information - 15 points
Entertainment - 20 points
Originality - 15 points
Boo-Boos - 10 points
"The Big Cheese" (overall view) - 25 points
Hallo, hallo, 'tis I Mercury from Ai No Senshi Reviews! A shrine be it, ey? Mweee, fun fun!
Main Page: First off, I like the black and purple color scheme. Very nice. The CSS coloring for the links is pretty, but the scrollbar seems a bit off. A little too much purple for my taste. ^^ Perhaps altering or switching the colors a bit might make it look better? But then again, that's what I think. =) Your main page content is short for the most part, leaving the requirements where they belong on the bottom of the page. Although in the disclaimer I noticed a minor spelling error, *alarms go off and the ticker in her brain is beating rapidly* You spelled "bishoujo" "bishouju"...from what I've seen it's spelled with an "o". ^^
The picture you have chosen for your left frame appears to be finely cut, but I can't decide if those links coincide very well with it. None of them run into the pic, which is good, but I guess what's bothering me is the color. While the color itself is fine, it just looks a bit out of place with the colors of the picture collaborating with it. Woa...there goes my brain...
Basic Info: See here the linking colors look fine. Maybe my head is going on me...as a side note, I do like that you gave descriptions of each of your pages.
Kaiou Michiru: Very good on bringing out your opinions and giving a "brief" but yet, "extensive" reading on your roles. I did, however find some grammar and spelling mistakes. You seplled "intelligent" "intellegent", (well ain't that ironic?) and your seem to have a run-on sentence in the second paragraph...here...
Aino Minako has just finished playing a racing game with Tenno Haruka, whom she and Tsukino Usagi think is a man, when Michiru shows up to collect her friend.
It comes across as a run-on...try this.
Aino Minako has just finished playing a raching game with Tenno Haruku, (whom she and Tskukino Usagi think is a man) when Michiru shows up to collect her friend.
Or you could use hyphens in place of the parentheses. =)
You also start a lot of your paragraphs with "Michiru". While petty as it may sound, it lacks a bit of variety. Try rearranging some of your sentences so they differ in construction a bit. ^^
Sailor Neptune S: Good information, but again, *trumpet music as Mercury gets out a dictionary* you spelled "silhouette" "sillioute", and towards the end you repeatedly used "tell" instead of "tells". Also, you also kept forgetting to capitalize "messiah", when you would in other places. You might want to take a look at that. ~.^
Sailor Neptune Stars: I'm going to have to trust that all of this info is correct. ^^ But in the third paragraph about Mars and Neptune, you used "calming" instead of "calmly". In the paragraph that begins, "In episode 197", you should have "allows" instead of "allow". In the next paragraph you also say "what they're doing" twice. ^^ When you say, "Neptune comes stepping out of the shadows", you might want to add the parentheses around your opinions to keep the story flowing smoothly.
Dreaded Stats: Neatly looking table. All information appears to be accurate.
A & P: Under Deep Submerge you say that she throws her heads forward...O.O...I think you meant to say "hands". (unless of course she's working for Cerebus...XD)
Super List: All appears to be correct.
Stars List: " "
Extra Details/Neptune: Lots of things here that I didn't know. But in the second line there is a small errors. Instead of "it", the word should be "it's". =)
Mythology: *drools* Oohhh...I just have one thing to add. You might want to mention that Poseidon/Neptune also "invented" the horse. In attempt to woo his beloved, he was determined to create the greatest animal ever known. Through his trials he also casted away the hippo, the rhino, and the giraffe before finally settling with the great horse. =)
Astrology: My only gripe is the same thing I said in the "Kaoiu Michiru"...you started all of your last paragraphs the same. Call it a pet peeve I guess. ^^;; Other then that I see no other major grammar errors.
Bloodtype: No major probs.
Talismans: Oh my, while informative, I do believe I saw the same exact explanation at Michiru's Book of Memories. I do know that you are friends and do not know if you shared, but you might want to look into that.
Love: Hm. I do believe that "Kalonite" is spelled "Kaolinite". You also have a "t" at the end of "although". And finally in the last paragraph you have "happy" instead of "happens". ^^
Galleries/Michi pics: Nice thumbnails, but it might be better if you had a little more...it just seems a little empty.
Neptune: " "
Manga: " "
U & N: " "
Group: The thumbnails are bigger then the others for some reason...also, they took a little longer to load. You might try resizing them.
Multi: Okay, I'm not going to try and download these because it says it's going to take 10 minutes. O.O You might want to put that somewhere. But from I see they're allowing me to download them. And that's they important thing, ney? The only thing is that you might want to add some important midis that are relevant to her...just a thought.
Site/Credits: Ah...so many sites these days don't credit. Good job.
Links: My only suggestion is that perhaps you link to a couple more Neptune Shrines. You might even consider some Neptune/Uranus related ones. ~.^
Rings: Just some clubs...^^
Reviews: Ohhh...tasty little reviews from other sites. ^^ Nice. I'll do some light reading later...
Dreambook: ^^
And now...the scoring!
Layout/Loading Time (11/15) Everything loaded quickly, thank the Almighty Chicken. ^^ I must admit that although your layout was incredibly simple, the navigation was VERY easy and as I said, I liked the colors. (although that scrollbar and those far left links sort of just don't do anything for me color wise) Now, just to get Michiru to stop staring at me...*whimpers*
Information (14/15): Correct info that I can see, and you bring it in some ways I haven't seen before. (ex. By season) I liked the extras, such as the mythology, (call me obsessed) astrology, and her blood type. The planet was good as well.
Entertainment: (13/20) Okay, while I could sit and play with the multimedia for ten minutes or drool over your info, I'd still have to admit that entertainment wise, this site did not do much for me. Perhaps some fiction or little Michi-customizable games could help you on your way to having a more "fun-filled" site. Or maybe even a little treasure hunt to find her violin...ohhh....(I'm getting ideas already!)
Originality (10/15): No one gives first impressions of Michiru being "dark", but hey, who said that you had to be like the Jones'? No one! ^^ I like that you're trying a different approach to introducing Michiru...also, you had a few more sections that I hadn't seen in other too many places. BUT, *points above* uh huh...~.^
Boo-Boos: (5/10) No broken links that I could see, but some of your spelling and grammar brought you down. However, like I tell everyone else, it's something that only takes five minutes to do and can easily bring your score back up.
"The Big Cheese" (overall view) - (21/25) - Overall I really did enjoy this site. You offered extensive information, and while not the most fun, I still find that your distinct outlook on things is really growing. Given time I think that this site will really grow into something. ^^
Total: 74/100 "The Roguefurd Cheese"